Narration of my first draft

My persuasive argument thesis is: Language has a profound influence on culture even though we have not realized well.

1. What do people already know about my topic?

  People already know that language has an effect on culture. However, they don't know the reasons why does.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

 

http://books.google.co.kr/books?id=tgCvkZw6N_QC&pg=PA17&lpg=PA17&dq=linguistic+influence+on+culture&source=bl&ots=1n1FbWemDZ&sig=JCt46yr83ythR0XZRIDMdg6KLyA&hl=ko&sa=X&ei=sfQgVKOiCsem8AXTqYK4Bg&ved=0CCcQ6AEwAA#v=onepage&q=linguistic%20influence%20on%20culture&f=false : My topic is called as lingusitic-cultural (and cognitive) parallelism (on page 17)

 

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Linguistic_relativity : Whorfian Theory

 

http://cafe.naver.com/engtalkclub/33232 : specific explanation about relationships between language and culture based on Whorfian theory

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

 

People would more concentrate on forming better linguistic habits because this is related to form better cultural features. If people ignore, they will be hard to form better culture. It's because as digital tools such as Internet develop, their linguistic habits would be worse and it would be hard to find both ideal language and ideal culture.

 

 

My narration

 

  The idea of linguistic influence on culture is included in Whorfian theory by Whorf. Whorfian theory is categorized into two, the strong and weak version. The strong version says that language could determine the way we think, and in contrast, the weak one says linguistic categories and usage could influence the way we think and certain kinds of non-linguistic behaviour. Among the related theories, there were some theories which opposed the topic. However, there was a theory of Fishman which agreed on the topic by proposing that language is a key of culture.

  Specifically, the idea could be called as linguistic-cultural parallelism according to the study of Robert Leon Cooper, named The Influence of Language on Culture and Thought. This is the claim that each language reflects the culture of its speech community. In addition, it explains that language and culture have connections between them. For example, Korean has a lot of honorifics and low talks because Korean culture puts an importance on vertical human relations.

  There is difference of argument between linguists and cultural anthropologists. It's because the relations between language and culture is not that clear. However, despite of this, many linguists and cultural anthropolgists agree on that language and culture are inseparably related. Also, there is a simple idea related to this that society and individuals are connected too because culture is formed by society and the society is made of individuals.

The introduction of my first draft

  Everyday we absolutely use langauge and we create and develop culture. We cannot live without language and culture in a society. Think about our daily lives. We naturally use language to communicate with others to seek better way to develop our culture. In other words, language could have an influence on culture. You might say this idea is a common belief that most people know so obviously that it doesn't need an explanation such as writing this essay. However, despite of our high recognition of this, we are not aware of importance of it. In fact, most of us don't even know that why this idea could be substanitated.

1. Attention grabber -
I attracted the audience by describing our lives connected to language and culture.

2. Explains the topic -
In the attention grabber I introduce the topic and the reason why I write this that we don't know why this idea could be substanitated.

3. My thesis -
My topic is that 'language has a profund influence on culture'. I think it is clear to describe the reasons for this.

Classical Argument Outline

1. The introduction, which warms up the audience, establishes goodwill and rapport with the readers, and announces the general theme or thesis of the argument.

I will start by saying that my argument is not an unique one. It is a common belief. But the reason why I choose this idea as a topic is that people are not that conscious about it. People need to be aware of this because we have to use better languages and words for forming better culture. If we would like to make developed culture, then we should have developed language habits.

2. The narration, which summarizes relevant background material, provides any information the audience needs to know about the environment and circumstances that produce the argument, and set up the stakes-what’s at risk in this question. In academic writing, this often takes the form of a literature review.

I will give a basic idea that culture and language are inseparably related. This is the most basic thing that people should know. Also I need to explain society and individuals are connected too because culture is formed by society and the society is made of individuals. (Finally it means that language habits of individuals form one particular society and furthermore, culture.)

3. The confirmation, which lays out in a logical order (usually strongest to weakest or most obvious to most subtle) the claims that support the thesis, providing evidence for each claim.

I will explain the reasons in this order. 1. Language habits lead to the formation and transformation of cultures. 2. Human mind and behavior affect society. 3. Culture usually follow the way of expressing feelings or some things which are helped by language) The order or the contents can be changed.

4. The refutation and concession, which looks at opposing viewpoints to the writer’s claims, anticipating objections from the audience, and allowing as much of the opposing viewpoints as possible without weakening the thesis.

1. It is not that impressive, because it is well-known theory. : Yes, it is. However, my purpose is to gather some attentions from people not be aware of this topic. Most people know this but they're unconscious about it. 2. How can you prove it?: by experiences or statistics. It is not hard to find some materials to prove the argument.

5. The summation, which provides a strong conclusion, amplifying the force of the argument, and showing the readers that this solution is the best at meeting the circumstances.

I will close with a summary of my previous points by arguing that people must have an interest about this topic to improve the quality of culture. The only solution is that people are aware of this and show the improvement by having interests on this.