Peer Evaluation for 20324 한주희

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
This essay deserves five points. It is persuasive and contains all the necessary parts

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
I think it is enough because she already had fixed her contentions for improvement.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
The black death helped the evolution of mankind.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
The black death contributed to the evolution of mankind.

Any other thoughts?
I think her thesis is great enough to attract readers

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
Yes

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
Yes. Her introduction did its role well.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
I think, yes it did.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
I think concession part is not enough to refute opponents' arguments.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
Yes. I think it was great.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
concession part should be improved.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I disagreed with it.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I still disagree with this.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
It was not that persuasive to change my mind.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
She should develop the concession part

Research
Is the author using research effectively?
Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes!

Are the sources obvious?
Yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Usually. She researched once again for her second draft.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
I think it's enough.